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Jun 5, 2010

Analysis of Love by Fiona McGier


PAGAN & PEN REVIEW

Title:  Analysis of Love
Author:  Fiona McGrier
Publisher: Wings ePress, Inc.
Genre: Erotica 
Length: 248 pgs.
Other: M/F/rape
Reviewed by: Violet Harper



About The Book: Catalina Reyes has always been in charge around men. She is the embodiment of a “hot Latina”, and she has enticed many a man to “take a walk on the salsa side of life”. The only problem for her is that she gets bored so easily. When men are ridiculously easy to get, they are replaceable also. Or so she has always thought.

When her boss’ boss assigns her to pose as a client with the blind analyst who he feels ruined his son’s life, he wants her to first seduce him, then destroy the doctor’s reputation. She has no choice, since firing her is only the first thing he will do to her, if she does not do as he orders. She is at first, thrilled that the doctor is such an attractive man, making the first part of her assignment something she would willingly do anyway. But something about the doctor makes him different from other men she has been with… has Catalina finally met her match?

The Review: If you’ve ever been stuck in a line next to someone who thinks you want to know everything about every member of their family, then you have an idea what the first five pages of this novel are like. This kind of exposition goes in one ear and out the other, and it’s better left unsaid until the appropriate time. Another thing that I found puzzling was the fact that all of the clichéd statements were italicized. (See above.) An author should strive to avoid using overused phrases, not italicize them to draw attention to them.

This novel suffered from head hopping, but that was the least of its problems.  The characters were not likable and the plot, besides dragging on for far too long, was horrifying.  It begins like this: 

Chapter 1:  Catalina enjoys sleeping around and she enjoys the bonuses from helping her boss ruin people.  Chapter 2: Catalina is appalled when her boss wants her to seduce a blind therapist. 

The dialogue only added to the exposition. At times, it felt like alternating between listening to Supermarket Woman speak and reading my old college psychology and sociology textbooks. I wish the author had spent a little more time with those texts because then she might have realized a few things.  First, the therapist does all the talking.  He lets her make him talk. This is completely unprofessional. A therapist who is supposed to be that well-trained isn’t going to be led that easily, especially by someone with whom he has little in common. 

Second, she pretty much rapes him—yes, men can be raped.  They can even ejaculate during the act.  That doesn’t make it consensual.  It isn’t hot or erotic, it’s disgusting and wrong.  Afterward, he continues to ‘see’ her professionally, but the sessions read more like dates, which is seriously creepy.

Some people might overlook the beginning and focus on the drama of Catalina double-crossing the publisher to prove her loyalty to Evan. They might like that the two forge a relationship during the second half of the novel. To me, none of that is relevant in the face of what happened at the beginning.

Pagan Elements: None

Cover (Rated 1-10):

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May 20, 2010

Bane of His Existence by Melody Knight


    
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Title:  Bane of His Existence
Author:  Melody Knight
Publisher:  Carnal Passions
Genre: Fantasy/Erotic Romance/M/F
Other: Shape shifter/werewolf
Length: 54 pgs.
Reviewed by: Violet Harper



About The Book: Charlie Ascott is a werewolf. He's been cursed with the condition for the last four years, doesn't recall the one who infected him, and has learned to live with it. The only thing he can't quite handle is the lust he feels for a certain she-wolf. He catches her scent every month at full moon, but when it's absent for a few days, he's beside himself. Some day he intends to track her down, but he's not ready for that "wolves mate for life" connection. When he catches a familiar scent in the elevator, he realizes it's her—his she-wolf. Suddenly, he's more ready for a connection than he realized.

Verity Connors is a manager in the company where Charlie works. She has been afraid of intimacy and friendships ever since she was bitten. She's a werewolf, and she keeps to herself, focusing on her work to avoid letting instinct run away with her. When she meets Charlie, though, she decides she's been playing solitaire far too long. It's time to take a chance, and Charlie's the one she wants to risk all with. The only way to do that is to let instinct run its course.

The Review: The first chapter starts strong. It’s an interesting idea and it begins with humor and wit. Because it’s a short story, the plot is simplistic. Two wolves who have no idea how they got that way, or what it means in their lives, find one another. This idea works well for a short story, but it relies completely on the quality of the character development. Unfortunately, this story consists mostly of exposition. There is little sensory language. The reader has no real idea what anyone, or anything, looks like. Scenes ripe for eroticism lack the sensory detail that readers need in order to feel what the characters feel. There is no clear differentiation between Charlie’s and Verity’s personalities. They both seem paranoid and they both seem to have the same conflict, handily resolved by forming a romantic relationship with one another. Because we don’t really get to know either character, we don’t care when they get together. This may be a blessing since the erotic scenes are glossed over as part of the exposition.

The spiritual aspects of the werewolf are completely overlooked. Both characters treat it like a virus. Full moons trigger outbreaks. Being a wolf is something with which the characters learn to cope instead of embrace and accept. It isn’t herpes; it’s an intrinsic part of who each of these people are. 

The stream of consciousness writing style, complete with incomplete sentences, thoughts left hanging, and mid-paragraph flips from third to second person point of view, made this story difficult to follow. Intermittent high ideals and an overused word-of-the-day calendar collide in an explosion of awkward wording that vacillates from formal to conversational to something that attempts to approximate the hardboiled detective writing of Hammett or Chandler. Words like ‘maladroit’ and ‘twat’ don’t work well together in this piece of writing. I could see it working in a comedic piece, but there was nothing funny about this story. Additionally, the author could benefit from an honest critique partner and an editor with an eye for misused commas, overused ellipses, and knowledge of the difference between ejected and ejaculated.

I can see the potential in this story and with this author, but it hasn’t yet been fully realized.

Pagan Elements: None

Cover (Rated 1-10): 7- A kissing couple, wolves in the background, and a cityscape below them make for an eye-catching cover.

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