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May 5, 2011

Moving Forward by Desmond Haas

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Title: Moving Forward
Author: Desmond Haas
Publisher: XOXO Publishing
Genre: Romance
Length: 74 pgs.
Reviewer: Strega

Cover: 3
Presentation: 4
Editing: 2
Story: 3
Writing Ability: 4

Overall Card Rating: 

The Book:
Amanda Cooper, scarred from burns received in a car accident,
suddenly meets her high school sweetheart. She keeps him at arms length, so he won’t be repulsed by her burns, but he wants to restart their relationship from ten years ago. Meanwhile, someone unknown has been sending her threatening letters and is hunting her down to kill her. Will she be killed by whoever is stalking her, or will Eric convince her he sees her beauty beyond her scars?

The Review:
Since this book was a special request from the review editor at The Pagan & The Pen Book Reviews, I had high hopes for a romance story that would take me along the angst and emotions of the H/H as they overcame whatever obstacles laid in front of them to find love and happily ever after. While there is a happily ever after, I was mostly disappointed in the story.

The biggest problem was the editing, or lack thereof. What could have been a warm-hearted, tearjerker was hindered by glaring editorial errors. Next was the stinted dialogue. The characters didn't come to life in my head as they should have with dialogue that could have been snappy, sentimental and fitting the situations. The story also felt rushed. There are so many characters introduced in the first chapter, it was difficult to remember who was who, and I had to keep going back to remind myself who everyone was.  And the cast of characters continued to grow until I really lost interest in who was doing what because I was left feeling confused and unable to keep each character straight in my mind.

The story line was very promising and the author does have talent, however he didn't really have the chance to shine as he should have because of all the other things that could have been solved during the editing process. Mr. Haas has a unique style and voice that I enjoyed and I will definitely be looking for more work from him.

Pagan Elements: N/A


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